|
|
Post by Lisa Arnold on Feb 22, 2009 5:14:42 GMT -5
b4, bridge, sierra and sunny and everyone else who commented on my dad's health, I just wanted to say thank you for the kind wishes. I am deeply touched  He is getting better by the day!  and thanks to all who commented on my poems have great Siunday and week!!  |
|
|
|
Post by cdlight on Feb 22, 2009 5:42:40 GMT -5
Ok, CD.. here's mine: time has no light eyes coming going silver flight blown brown letters unread I'm assuming the last line was a typo because it has 6 syllables and two words together with one letter different...kinda like you were trying to edit it. Am I mistaken? CD |
|
|
|
Post by icee on Feb 23, 2009 1:22:36 GMT -5
good challenge Lola, here's mine:) broken reflection cold waters ripple, silent morning horizon this is so good Lisa, very visual thanks for sharing |
|
|
|
Post by b4sunset on Feb 23, 2009 1:24:10 GMT -5
Agree, CD.. i did this without editing-- raw like the way i want to write so everything comes from the gut. have you heard of "writing down the bones" by natalie goldberg?? i subsrcribe to that, and julia cameron's " morning pages.." thanks for sifting this through.. if this was a modern haiku, it'll pass.. BUT, this section is about TRADITIONAL haiku and i respect the rules, thanks to LOLA  so, here it is again: |
|
|
|
Post by b4sunset on Feb 23, 2009 1:35:45 GMT -5
time has no light eyes
coming going silver flight
blown letters unread [/size][/font][/color]
|
|
|
|
Post by sunny on Feb 23, 2009 1:42:39 GMT -5
time has no light eyes
coming going silver flight
blown letters unread [/size][/font][/color][/quote] b4 Pal, this is soooooo good!!! |
|
|
|
Post by Jay on Feb 23, 2009 5:55:46 GMT -5
Lisa, I love both of yours, thanks so much for sharing with us:)
|
|
|
|
Post by Lola on Feb 25, 2009 8:23:41 GMT -5
thanks for all the great poems everyone!!
|
|
|
|
Post by immusie on Feb 25, 2009 19:47:06 GMT -5
eye(s)
letter
time
|
|
|
|
Post by Joan on Feb 26, 2009 4:36:14 GMT -5
I am going with the orignal words
broken
silent
horizon
broken stars dangle
in silent midnight blue sky
dawn breaks horizon
|
|
|
|
Post by sunny on Feb 26, 2009 8:04:11 GMT -5
I am going with the orignal words broken silent horizon broken stars dangle in silent midnight blue sky dawn breaks horizon very nice image in your words Johan! |
|
|
|
Post by Dana on Feb 27, 2009 5:10:45 GMT -5
nice poem Joan, very good imagery!
|
|
|
|
Post by immusie on Feb 28, 2009 8:35:04 GMT -5
Everyone has done such a wonderful job with these...beautiful work all!  |
|
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
