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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 13, 2006 7:46:23 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 13, 2006 7:46:23 GMT -5 thanks so much Treasure and Sara, I am happy with my rewrite too:)
	dreams echo within...

icee Echoes Family Member Veiled Emotions Friend of Echoes striving and reaching Posts: 661	TALISMAN Mar 14, 2006 21:02:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by icee on Mar 14, 2006 21:02:45 GMT -5 I like this, good images and deep mystery to this write, I like your rewrite too, good job:)
	give of your soul

narukun Echoes Junior Member Posts: 66	TALISMAN Mar 14, 2006 23:50:25 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by narukun on Mar 14, 2006 23:50:25 GMT -5 I like this piece... It's deep and cointains ALOT of imagery. GOOD WORK! I just love this part. Crooked branches droop Listless on rotten trees As scattered leaves Dance in the breeze. Good work!

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 15, 2006 21:26:17 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 15, 2006 21:26:17 GMT -5 thanks so much narukun!
	dreams echo within...

Zeb Echoes Family Member Intrepid Warrior Ging Gang, Gooly Gooly, Wash Wash, Ging Gang Goo, Ging Gang Goo Posts: 541	TALISMAN Mar 16, 2006 1:11:17 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Zeb on Mar 16, 2006 1:11:17 GMT -5 huh?..lol..this quote iz from my suggestionz..not he original post Ed..he he.. Crooked branches droop Listless on rotten trees As scattered leaves Dance in the breeze.

Toni Echoes Family Member Haiku Princess KEEPING PEACE WITHIN Friend of Echoes Seeking and Hoping Posts: 744	TALISMAN Mar 16, 2006 17:38:29 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Toni on Mar 16, 2006 17:38:29 GMT -5 excellent work, Lisa great summation, I like the way you leave it up the reader to ponder what the outcome will be...nice!
	"Be kind to those you do not know"

Cherrie Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Loving This Beautiful Life Posts: 1,002	TALISMAN Mar 16, 2006 17:56:30 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Cherrie on Mar 16, 2006 17:56:30 GMT -5 great write, these are my favorite lines Vipers slither in the grass. Steel-gray eyes search black night for any avenue of escape. great depiction of the desperation the character feels, well-done!
	"Trying to step out of my own way"

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 21, 2006 21:06:52 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 21, 2006 21:06:52 GMT -5 Thanks Toni and Cherrie!
	dreams echo within...

rrw Echoes Family Member You gotta move Posts: 5,998	TALISMAN Mar 22, 2006 0:29:24 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rrw on Mar 22, 2006 0:29:24 GMT -5 Lisa you should post this on the main board if you think it's ready. great job.
	Last Edit: Mar 22, 2006 0:30:44 GMT -5 by rrw

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 27, 2006 1:22:42 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 27, 2006 1:22:42 GMT -5 hey rrw, you are right, I think I will soon, thanks for the suggestion:)
	dreams echo within...

Kristi Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Posts: 677	TALISMAN Apr 15, 2010 5:25:53 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kristi on Apr 15, 2010 5:25:53 GMT -5 good poem Lisa, love both versions! I have never read this one before. much liked!
	looked within liked what I found

Rose Echoes Family Member Posts: 562	TALISMAN Apr 15, 2010 11:41:08 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Rose on Apr 15, 2010 11:41:08 GMT -5 love this, you write so well. I like how easy this one flows and how you draw us to the conclusion which is open-ended.

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Apr 15, 2010 12:15:24 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 15, 2010 12:15:24 GMT -5 many thanks Kristi and Rose!
	dreams echo within...

rico
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TALISMAN Apr 16, 2010 6:51:50 GMT -5

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Post by rico on Apr 16, 2010 6:51:50 GMT -5

excellent write!

I like way you leave the reader on the edge of their seat and with an uncertain ending, good job

love these lines:

"Vipers slither in the grass.
Steel-gray eyes
search black night
for any avenue of escape.

Edge of dawn soon will rise.
Haunted soul clutches talisman,
crossing muddy waters
over to the other side,
praying life does not end
before morning sunrise."

Last Edit: Apr 16, 2010 6:53:09 GMT -5 by rico

Jack Echoes Senior Member Friend of Echoes Posts: 468	TALISMAN Apr 17, 2010 0:33:32 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jack on Apr 17, 2010 0:33:32 GMT -5 this write is beyond great, I love it!!