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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 10:35:41 GMT -5
EMERGENCE
Simplicity vacates my existence.
I am mired beneath resistance.
My life is cold, without purpose.
My efforts to find balance are often fruitless.
I allowed my soul to compromised
by the rapid fall of my inner demise.
I refused to pay witness to all around me
and accepted unforgiving bitter agony.
Slipping inside the reigns
of ugliness, struggle and pain,
I refused to open my eyes to the glorious light
and of my hopes and dreams, I lost sight.
Ominous nightmares evade my slumber.
I build a protective shelter
and seek within to find keys to my release,
until the hour I regain my belief.
©2004 Lisa Arnold
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this is an older poem of mine. I used the first stanza of ths poem for the quatrain challenge...
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Post by Betty on Apr 18, 2010 10:44:09 GMT -5
great write Lisa!
good rhyme scheme.
You delved into your soul for this one...great ending!
"Ominous nightmares evade my slumber.
I build a protecting shelter
and seek within to find keys to my release,
until the hour I regain my belief."
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Post by Dana on Apr 18, 2010 11:37:38 GMT -5
I can really identify with these passages:
"I allowed my soul to compromised
by the rapid fall of my inner demise.
I refused to pay witness to all around me
and accepted unforgiving bitter agony.
Slipping inside the reigns
of ugliness, struggle and pain,
I refused to open my eyes to the glorious light
and of my hopes and dreams, I lost sight,"
truly a great write and thanks for posting!
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Post by Brian on Apr 18, 2010 11:41:24 GMT -5
:-[well-worded and presented, enjoyed the read  have a great day all   |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 11:57:18 GMT -5
great write Lisa! good rhyme scheme. You delved into your soul for this one...great ending! "Ominous nightmares evade my slumber.
I build a protecting shelter
and seek within to find keys to my release,
until the hour I regain my belief."  Betty yes, you are right I was in a dark place when I wrote this one, but I am in a bettter place now |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 11:59:05 GMT -5
I can really identify with these passages: "I allowed my soul to compromised by the rapid fall of my inner demise. I refused to pay witness to all around me and accepted unforgiving bitter agony. Slipping inside the reigns of ugliness, struggle and pain, I refused to open my eyes to the glorious light and of my hopes and dreams, I lost sight," truly a great write and thanks for posting! dear Dana I hope you can one day see the light |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 12:00:20 GMT -5
:-[well-worded and presented, enjoyed the read have a great day all Brian, I really appreciate the read you have a great day too  |
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Post by Billy on Apr 18, 2010 12:24:23 GMT -5
very well written Lisa. I like the hope you give the reader in the end. I was glad to read that you didn't leave it in the dark. Enjoyed!
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Post by Rose on Apr 18, 2010 12:37:10 GMT -5
wow, I am LOVING the emergence of energy, passion and emotion in this piece, great job!
Enjoy your day!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 13:00:06 GMT -5
thanks Billy! many thanks Rose! you both enjoy your day as well |
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Post by Jay on Apr 18, 2010 13:18:40 GMT -5
Lisa you know this has always been one of favorite poems by you and it still reads well, great job!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 18, 2010 13:30:05 GMT -5
Hey Jay thanks bunches |
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Post by percy on Apr 18, 2010 23:59:27 GMT -5
very well-crafted poem that is enriched with great detail and imagery!
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Post by Betty on Apr 19, 2010 3:56:27 GMT -5
great write Lisa! good rhyme scheme. You delved into your soul for this one...great ending! "Ominous nightmares evade my slumber.
I build a protecting shelter
and seek within to find keys to my release,
until the hour I regain my belief." Betty yes, you are right I was in a dark place when I wrote this one, but I am in a bettter place now hey Lisa you are welcome, and I am so glad to hear you are in a better place |
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Post by Reggie on Apr 19, 2010 4:27:19 GMT -5
simply beautiful writing as always!
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Betty 
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
