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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 20, 2010 6:12:40 GMT -5
this was published online in March of 2005. It was my first online publication. Unfortunately, the ezine is no longer publishing or online...TOMORROWS RAIN
Shelter's protection
I long for from
the coming of
tomorrow's rain.
My life is imprisoned
by gripping anguish
and encased by
crippling inner pain.
Cold and shivering,
I am trapped under
the weight of its
torrential downpour.
I am drenched
and cannot breathe.
I'll drown here like this
if I do not discover
something more.
I watch in horror
as the second hand
relays to me that today
is about to turn
into another tomorrow.
Desperately, I seek
protection in
the depths of
heavy shadows.
As I cling to my faith,
I pray I can find
peace hidden in
its deepest fold.
If I can achieve this,
perhaps, I will avoid
the dreadful coming
of tomorrow's rain.
©2004 Lisa Arnold
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Post by Betty on Apr 20, 2010 6:27:03 GMT -5
a well-written piece that explores many emotions!
enjoyed!
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Post by Sierra on Apr 20, 2010 6:47:03 GMT -5
I am liking this one Lisa! Great job  you write with great emotion, which I love  Off to work for me, see you all later  |
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Post by Alicia on Apr 20, 2010 7:10:54 GMT -5
Ia m back! Had a great time with hubby...sent you guys a PM  love the picture it really enhances the read fine write...love these lines: As I cling to my faith, I pray I can find peace hidden in its deepest fold. If I can achieve this, perhaps, I will avoid the dreadful coming of tomorrow's rain. |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 20, 2010 7:15:17 GMT -5
a well-written piece that explores many emotions! enjoyed!  Betty |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 20, 2010 7:17:00 GMT -5
I am liking this one Lisa! Great job you write with great emotion, which I love Off to work for me, see you all later Hello Sierra, thank you ever so kindly don't work too hard |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 20, 2010 7:21:40 GMT -5
Ia m back! Had a great time with hubby...sent you guys a PM love the picture it really enhances the read fine write...love these lines: As I cling to my faith, I pray I can find peace hidden in its deepest fold. If I can achieve this, perhaps, I will avoid the dreadful coming of tomorrow's rain. Alicia got your PM, lol  good to have you back |
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Post by Silent-One on Apr 20, 2010 7:32:09 GMT -5
Lisa, you written a great poem. We all have those times when we feel life is "drowning" us. But we must have hope and belief and that is what you provide in the end of your poem..an edge of hope Truly enjoyed this I remember  this poem a few years back, and it is still a great write and read have great day |
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Post by Eddie on Apr 20, 2010 7:50:42 GMT -5
great passages in this well-written poem such as this one:
"My life is imprisoned
by gripping anguish
and encased by
crippling inner pain."
you touch on many emotions such as pain ,anguish, fear, self-doubt as well as belief, perseverance, hope and much more...beautiful picture too!
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Post by ciara on Apr 20, 2010 8:11:44 GMT -5
I enjoyed the read. I know some days I have felt as if life was going to swallow me whole, but through prayer I always get over those bad days...great write!
these are my favorite parts:
"I watch in horror
as the second hand
relays to me that today
is about to turn
into another tomorrow.
Desperately, I seek
protection in
the depths of
heavy shadows.
As I cling to my faith,
I pray I can find
peace hidden in
its deepest fold.
If I can achieve this,
perhaps, I will avoid
the dreadful coming
of tomorrow's rain."
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Post by Brian on Apr 20, 2010 8:29:56 GMT -5
this sums it up so well:
"Shelter's protection
I long for from
the coming of
tomorrow's rain."
isn't that what we all want, to be sheltered from all of life's problems...great stuff here Lisa!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 20, 2010 9:12:09 GMT -5
many thanks Harry, Eddie, Ciara and Brian have a great and blessed day people...I am off to run errands and then back to writing |
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Post by bridge on Apr 20, 2010 9:55:01 GMT -5
love it...great lines throughout!!
Lisa, I am sorry for the short response, but I am running late for work.
have a wonderful day everyone...I am out!
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Post by Joan on Apr 20, 2010 10:50:57 GMT -5
good use of rain as a metaphor for anguish and despair...I truly love this write I am so glad you left that little edge of hope at the end hope your day is going well and happy writing |
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Post by rico on Apr 20, 2010 11:18:48 GMT -5
I can hear you on this one Lisa! enjoyed this much have great day I am popping in on my lunch hour. I will be back later |
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Betty 
this poem a few years back, and it is still a great write and read 
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
