SCENT OF LAVENDER

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 15, 2005 5:42:16 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 15, 2005 5:42:16 GMT -5 I appreciate you commenting on my work, trina!
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Eddie Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Am I here? Posts: 860	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 16, 2005 2:51:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eddie on Jul 16, 2005 2:51:18 GMT -5 nice work, Lisa! flows so well:)

sweetpest Guest	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 16, 2005 7:06:50 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by sweetpest on Jul 16, 2005 7:06:50 GMT -5 Fantastic poem with great imagery!! Nothing like the smell of lavender.

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 17, 2005 6:37:04 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 17, 2005 6:37:04 GMT -5 thanks Eddie:)
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 17, 2005 6:37:51 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 17, 2005 6:37:51 GMT -5 Hey Swet, you are so right lavender is a very comforting aroma:) thanks for the read and comment!
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SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 17, 2005 14:12:19 GMT -5

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Post by nicolelavonne on Jul 17, 2005 14:12:19 GMT -5

This whole poem is smooth and sweet, the visuals and the images are effective and easily captivate me, the reader.

I have a nit for this stanza:

inside succulent
winds lingers
the scent
of lavender

I would make "lingers" singular.
Then it would read: "Inside succulent winds linger the scent of lavender..."

The rest of the poem is great. I love the line breaks, and the clever use of the syllable count of 4 in your second to last stanza, and the count of 5 in your last stanza.

Great writing!

I don't create poetry, I create myself, for me my poems are a way to me. ~Edith Södergran

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 18, 2005 2:08:33 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 18, 2005 2:08:33 GMT -5 thanks so much for the suggestion Nicole, and yes "linger" does work better:) I appreciate your nice comments as well!
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Jay Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes striving to believe Posts: 622	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 18, 2005 18:48:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jay on Jul 18, 2005 18:48:14 GMT -5 very inspiring write flows so well

ciara Echoes Family Member Motivated by Passion Friend of Echoes Posts: 821	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 21, 2005 5:22:13 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ciara on Jul 21, 2005 5:22:13 GMT -5 love this one Lisa, it brings a great feeling to my soul! well done, my friend:)
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 21, 2005 19:56:52 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 21, 2005 19:56:52 GMT -5 I appreciate your comment Jay:)
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 21, 2005 19:58:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 21, 2005 19:58:14 GMT -5 Hey ciara! I am so glad you love this one! thanks for the read and comment, my friend:)
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Jack Echoes Senior Member Friend of Echoes Posts: 468	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 22, 2005 2:13:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jack on Jul 22, 2005 2:13:39 GMT -5 Hi Lisa ;D sorry it took me so long for me to post here, I have been real busy LOVE this poem, you have some great talent with words and emotion, well done talk soon

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 23, 2005 0:07:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 23, 2005 0:07:14 GMT -5 Jack, so glad you made it here thanks for the lovely words ;D
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Bob Moderator[/size] Haiku Enthusiast! Forever hoping Posts: 2,487	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 24, 2005 2:53:08 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Bob on Jul 24, 2005 2:53:08 GMT -5 Lisa, the beauty of your poem is its brevity and tone a job well done talks with you later ;D
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	SCENT OF LAVENDER Jul 26, 2005 4:29:46 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 26, 2005 4:29:46 GMT -5 THANKS so much Bob! I look forward to chatting with ya:)
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