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Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 8, 2004 5:29:36 GMT -5
:)Hello Echoes, I first wrote this one about 18 years ago. This is a slightly revised version I wrote in 2004. It was also part of the art/poetry exhibit me and my sister had at an art gallery in 1992. I pulled this one up from the Poetry Section because I did not have a new poem to post for the day...Let me know what you think
ALL I CRAVE
I am alive with rage. It pulsates, divinely, through my icy veins.
I am led by all I can never have. Like the rush of a heavy August rain, I am defined by the thrust of my pain.
I live on the brink of a slippery ridge. I am alone with all my fears.
With desire, I am a fire. I lust after sorrow. Deep in self-doubt, I wallow.
On the other side of positive, I dwell. I pilfer and beg. Of myself, I never give. It takes so much just for me to live.
I am buried alive by my desires. Not until I reach my grave, will I ever stop longing for all I crave.
©2004 Lisa Arnold
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Post by Cherrie on Dec 8, 2004 14:45:34 GMT -5
Hi Lisa, I like it It has a very beautiful rhyme scheme and it is poignantly written Very nice work
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Post by Seashellstarz on Dec 8, 2004 15:43:20 GMT -5
I think you are telling realism in an unrealistic way.
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Post by Tina on Dec 8, 2004 16:20:26 GMT -5
Hey Lisa, I like this one too, it's not unrealistic to me Nice work. Thanks for sharing I feel the same way, I refuse to give up my dreams, they are to important
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Post by Dana on Dec 8, 2004 17:35:18 GMT -5
I find it to very well writen and expressed, not unrealistic to me at all. Nice read ;D
These are my favorite stanzas
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Post by Sharon on Dec 8, 2004 18:10:20 GMT -5
Hi Lisa, I love this one, very powerfully written
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 8, 2004 18:48:01 GMT -5
Hi all, I appreciate all your comments
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Post by Seashellstarz on Dec 8, 2004 22:15:52 GMT -5
I don't mean it's unrealistic. I just think that it is written in a fearfully powerful way, which is very good.
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 9, 2004 3:33:32 GMT -5
Hey Shellz ;D for clearing that up Glad you liked it
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Post by Cherrie on Dec 9, 2004 11:58:03 GMT -5
Hey Shellz, I got your meaning now
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Post by Helen on Dec 9, 2004 16:13:32 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Nice poem, Lisa [/glow]
Beautifully penned
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 10, 2004 3:02:49 GMT -5
Helen
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Post by Sharon on Dec 11, 2004 5:47:35 GMT -5
You're welcome girlie
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Post by Brokenpen on Apr 29, 2005 13:04:19 GMT -5
hey this is a great poem.. thanks for sharing it with us all.~brokenpen
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Post by pixie on Apr 29, 2005 13:41:06 GMT -5
I thought it was amazingly penned, great poem pix xx
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