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Post by Lisa Arnold on Sept 25, 2006 9:38:30 GMT -5
 Hello Echoes Family, I am pulling "Eyes of Sorrow" up today to share with you guys...I know some of you have read and want to read it again and others have been asking to read it. I have made a few changes...hope you like it  [/color]  EYES OF SORROW
eyes of sorrow stare
through broken-pane glass window,
nothing to ease hunger pangs
mother walks the streets
father never known, a child
awaits rescue from this hell
© 2006 Lisa Arnold
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Post by Silent-One on Sept 25, 2006 9:56:25 GMT -5
another great one, Lisa
very poignant
a sad truth for too many of our youth of today...
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Post by Sara on Sept 25, 2006 10:02:32 GMT -5
so true and sad, Lisa
well-done!
I used to work with kids in these kind of situations and it broke my heart...
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Post by Brian on Sept 25, 2006 10:17:05 GMT -5
I like this one too,
a sad commentary indeed
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Post by Eddie on Sept 25, 2006 17:15:41 GMT -5
haunting write, much enjoyed this, Lisa
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Post by MoonMuse on Sept 25, 2006 18:29:24 GMT -5
So sad and emotionally expressive. Well formed and very good Lisa. I really like it  |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Sept 25, 2006 20:15:32 GMT -5
thanks Harry, Sara, Brian, Eddie and Karen, I really appreciate the nice comments!
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Post by Bob on Sept 26, 2006 10:29:48 GMT -5
strong theme, makes one thankful for the life they have, it is ashame that some children have to grow up this way, nice portait of that plight, Lisa
you have a way with these...could make for an interesting collection:)
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Post by kathylynn on Sept 26, 2006 11:14:31 GMT -5
Lisa, how sad and true this write is. good work.
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Sept 27, 2006 9:01:23 GMT -5
thanks so much Bob and Kathy!
Bob, I was thnking along those lines of turning them into a book or a section of a collection:)
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Post by rrw on Sept 27, 2006 9:06:11 GMT -5
The image is sharp. You have such a wonderful straightforward approach to your writing. Lisa. Economic. Hits the mark.
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Post by paintedpostcards on Sept 27, 2006 19:44:43 GMT -5
Nice and swift good one Lisa PP
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Sept 28, 2006 6:20:55 GMT -5
much appreciate your kind comments rrw and Nataly!
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Post by countrygalcc on Sept 28, 2006 13:33:05 GMT -5
short and sad. I feel the pain of this child looking through a glass of pain and
hoping to be taken away from the misery. Powerful with these words you
have written makes you see a long story. This poem has a lot of images to
it. Word for word it moves you into the sadness.
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Post by Charles on Sept 28, 2006 15:44:37 GMT -5
very visually done...sad and truthful
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Hello Echoes Family, I am pulling "Eyes of Sorrow" up today to share with you guys...I know some of you have read and want to read it again and others have been asking to read it. I have made a few changes...hope you like it 
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echoes, hope you all are doing well 
