BED OF A BROKEN LEAF

[Lisa Arnold]

Hey everyone, I pulled this one up today because I do not have time to post a new poem...It's slightly different from when I first posted it years ago...hope you guys like it

Sometimes
every poet
becomes
a thief.

At times,
words elude us,
leaving only
empty thoughts
and remnants
of our beliefs.

Often, we
dance and fall
into the arms
of misery
and grief.

In our possession,
we often hold
nothing
and feel the loss
of relief.

Frequently, our
hopes, desires
and dreams
are stolen
by the crush
of disbelief.

All we love
and cherish,
we place on
the shallow
bed of a broken
leaf.

And pray within
the depths
of our precious
souls, someone,
some day, will offer
us gentle release.

Sometimes
every poet
becomes
a thief.


© 2001/2010 by Lisa Arnold

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[Helen]

I like this one, good lines going on. I like this part the best and I agree we all do become a thief when we get writer's block :

All we know
we hold on
the shallow bed
of a broken leaf.

And our hopes, desires
and dreams are often
stolen by the crush
of disbelief.

[Brian]

flows well, nice rhyme scheme, good write

I guess, we all do "borrow" every now and then ;D

[wrightkevinb]

This was very good! The form you chose and the flow compliments the piece. Well done! Enjoyed much!

[Brianna]

very well written, good flow, great job

[Bob]

very well crafted, good sense of flow, great rhyme scheme, very good write

I love the title ;D

and this section sticks out the most for me:

Words elude us leaving
us with empty thoughts
as we lose a sense
of our beliefs

[Toni]

wow, what a briliant write, you packed in so much emotion and depth in such a short poem, great job

I love the title as well ;D

you have managed to capture the soul of a poet very wwell here

[Lee]

nice job, I love the title

oh, this is so true

Sometimes
every poet
becomes
a thief.

[countrygalcc]

Lisa this is a very good poem.
I like the title plus these lines:

All we know
we hold on
the shallow bed
of a broken leaf.

And our hopes, desires
and dreams are often
stolen by the crush
of disbelief.

Sometimes
every poet
becomes
a thief.

Lovely work!

[whisperpoems]

This is so true Lisa!
Great write! It flows very well and I like the form you used here. Wonderful job!
Kaminten

[aquarianstar]

Wow, Lisa great write!

I can relate, and I liked the form- the full stops after every stanza, it works well.

Good job! ;D ;D

[Lisa Arnold]

thank you all so very much

I really appreciate the feedback

[stan]

This is real poetry.
I enjoyed it very much ;D
Stan

[iris]

OMG I loveyour poem. It's beautiful and I think your right.

Great Write, this poem is perfect!!!! ;D

[Lisa Arnold]

thank you very much, Stan and Iris