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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 4:33:42 GMT -5
FRACTURED
wretched hands
scratch at
bare earth
on broken wings
angels descend
from
saturated blue-ray
sky
death of daylight
comes
bringing birth
to dusk
behind misty
shadows
awaits salvation
for his fractured
soul
©Brian
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Post by Tamika on Sept 27, 2010 4:42:32 GMT -5
excellent poem Brian 
enjoyed the read 
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Post by rico on Sept 27, 2010 4:53:14 GMT -5
great poem, love it 
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Post by Brianna on Sept 27, 2010 4:53:29 GMT -5
Hello Brian, I really enjoyed this poem 
Very vivid imagery that pulls the reader in, well-done
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Post by trina on Sept 27, 2010 5:02:53 GMT -5
I love the entire poem, great job
these parts stand out for me:
"on broken wings
angels descend
from
saturated blue-ray
sky
death of daylight
comes
bringing birth
to dusk"
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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 5:09:02 GMT -5
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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 5:10:00 GMT -5
great poem, love it  |
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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 5:10:58 GMT -5
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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 5:12:26 GMT -5
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Post by Rose on Sept 27, 2010 5:13:24 GMT -5
fantastic job Brian, great images and story-telling!
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Post by Brian on Sept 27, 2010 5:15:10 GMT -5
thanks so much Rose, you also made my day 
enjoy your day Echoes, I am off to work 
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Post by Rose on Sept 27, 2010 5:16:43 GMT -5
you are welcome Brian...you have a nice day too
off to work for me too
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Post by Dana on Sept 27, 2010 14:19:08 GMT -5
great job Brian...I really love your opening lines:
"wretched hands
scratch at
bare earth"
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Sept 27, 2010 14:34:46 GMT -5
excellent write Brian
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Post by Silent-One on Sept 27, 2010 14:47:47 GMT -5
wow, this is super fine writing Brian!
sleek and poignant...great job!
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my poem 
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
