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BROKEN
Dec 14, 2004 6:18:59 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 14, 2004 6:18:59 GMT -5
I wrote this one in 2004. I revised it, somewhat, this morning..Let me know whatcha think BROKEN
Standing vacantly alone, on this long treacherous night, I long to taste your soul and pray for the warmth of your sweet embrace.
Dreaming of you craving my kiss on the full of your wanton lips, satisfies my every desire. Within ominous winds my passionate screams are gently cradled.
I was broken before you opened the door. Now, I am healed from deep within and breathing life again.
Inside the temple of my longing I was drowning in uncharted waters until, mercifully, I was rescued by the grace of your savior hands.
As we dance in this spiral of chance, take me in your arms and never let go until our days are tragically no more.
I was broken before you opened the door. Now, I am healed from deep within breathing glorious life again.
©2004 Lisa Arnold
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BROKEN
Dec 14, 2004 6:51:48 GMT -5
Post by Tina on Dec 14, 2004 6:51:48 GMT -5
Hi Lisa, Love the flow and sense of emotion in this one Very nice work
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BROKEN
Dec 14, 2004 7:11:01 GMT -5
Post by Brian on Dec 14, 2004 7:11:01 GMT -5
Lisa, I cherish this poem. It speaks to my soul! Great sense of lanuage and deep felt emotion. Great job
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BROKEN
Dec 14, 2004 9:57:38 GMT -5
Post by Seashellstarz on Dec 14, 2004 9:57:38 GMT -5
;)Great poem! I was thinking that... maybe the first few parts need more punctuation? Still, it maybe just the style?
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BROKEN
Dec 14, 2004 15:11:55 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 14, 2004 15:11:55 GMT -5
everyone You may be right Shellz, I'll look it over ;D
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BROKEN
Dec 15, 2004 5:46:23 GMT -5
Post by Sharon on Dec 15, 2004 5:46:23 GMT -5
Lisa, this is a beautifully written poem and it flows wonderfully
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BROKEN
Dec 15, 2004 5:59:25 GMT -5
Post by Cherrie on Dec 15, 2004 5:59:25 GMT -5
Hi Lisa,
I can only mirror what everyone else has said so far, it is a very well written and poignant piece
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BROKEN
Dec 15, 2004 16:21:42 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 15, 2004 16:21:42 GMT -5
so much Cherrie
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BROKEN
Jan 4, 2005 21:03:29 GMT -5
Post by TheSoulChildWritten on Jan 4, 2005 21:03:29 GMT -5
beautifully written
and a great sense of calmness
keep the flow going
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BROKEN
Jan 5, 2005 17:28:04 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Jan 5, 2005 17:28:04 GMT -5
SoulChild
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BROKEN
Jan 6, 2005 10:55:36 GMT -5
Post by countrygalcc on Jan 6, 2005 10:55:36 GMT -5
Wonderful writing! Beautiful!
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BROKEN
Oct 28, 2010 20:39:22 GMT -5
Post by The Great Fulcanelli on Oct 28, 2010 20:39:22 GMT -5
Wow! One thing is certain and it is this: true love always redeems whatever it cost.
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BROKEN
Oct 28, 2010 22:15:21 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Oct 28, 2010 22:15:21 GMT -5
wow, this is an oldie by me, I do not even remember posting this one, it was 6 years ago!
I do not post in this section too much anymore, so I was very surprised to see a post my me
anyway, thanks for commenting cock-Robin and you are so right!!
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BROKEN
Oct 28, 2010 23:38:19 GMT -5
Post by Betty on Oct 28, 2010 23:38:19 GMT -5
oh wow Lisa, I wasn't even member of Echoes when you posted this one
great job
you should move it to the Lounge
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BROKEN
Oct 29, 2010 0:17:12 GMT -5
Post by mark on Oct 29, 2010 0:17:12 GMT -5
outstanding write Lisa, great tone and emotion! I do not remember ever this one here or elsewhere
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