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Post by Lisa Arnold on Feb 18, 2005 17:25:58 GMT -5
Simplicity vacates my existence.
I am mired beneath resistance.
My life is cold, without purpose.
My efforts to find balance are often fruitless.
I allowed my soul to be compromised
by the rapid fall of my inner demise.
I refused to pay witness to all around me
and accepted unforgiving bitter agony.
Slipping inside the reigns
of ugliness, struggle and pain,
I refused to open my eyes to the glorious light
and of my hopes and dreams, I lost sight.
Ominous nightmares evade my slumber,
but I'm building a protective shelter
as I seek within to find keys to my release,
until the hour I regain my belief.
©2004 Lisa Arnold |
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Post by aquarianstar on Feb 18, 2005 17:29:46 GMT -5
Very beautiful and soulful. This piece dragged me in so fast, fabulous write. Nice and suitable structure also. good work!  |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Feb 18, 2005 17:49:53 GMT -5
thanks so much aquarianstar  |
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Post by aquarianstar on Feb 18, 2005 17:52:04 GMT -5
Your welcome Lisa! ;D
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Post by MoonMuse on Feb 18, 2005 19:10:38 GMT -5
Great flow and sounds hopeful at the end. Well done indeed |
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Post by Brian on Feb 18, 2005 19:59:48 GMT -5
wonderfully posed, Lisa, excellent form of the quantrain, fantastic write love this part the best: |
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Post by Sharon on Feb 19, 2005 5:44:33 GMT -5
fantastic emotion, depth and flow, excellent write |
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Post by Lee on Feb 19, 2005 7:19:05 GMT -5
fantastic write! I was into it from the first line to the last, I love the sense of hope in the end, it gave me a good feeling, congrats on the award |
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Post by Jay on Feb 19, 2005 7:53:34 GMT -5
gripping read, fantastic job, conrats on the award |
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Post by Helen on Feb 19, 2005 8:25:34 GMT -5
a well-expressed and posed poem, fantastic write |
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Post by Cherrie on Feb 19, 2005 9:35:57 GMT -5
great poem, Lisa, thanks for posting, congrats on the award ;D
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Post by redwillow on Feb 19, 2005 11:18:55 GMT -5
 beautiful;D congratulations, Lisa
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Feb 19, 2005 19:00:43 GMT -5
 so very much for the congrats and comments, Karen, Brian, Sharon, Lee, Jay, Helen and redwillow 
and thanks for the award, Sharon
you all made my day much brighter ;D
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JeannineWeaver
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The opposite of love is not hate, it is indifference.
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Post by JeannineWeaver on Feb 19, 2005 21:35:15 GMT -5
Dear Lisa,
It sounds as though you and I are in a very similar place...and I appreciate your renewed sense of hope emerging at the end of your very soulfull words.
Congratulations on your award; it is well-earned!
Jeannine
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Feb 20, 2005 16:56:02 GMT -5
Hi Jeannine,  thank you so much for you kind comments. Yes, I am at a place where I am emerging from the shadows and seeking the light It's a great place to be in life, isn't it? Take care |
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beautiful;D
so very much for the congrats and comments, Karen, Brian, Sharon, Lee, Jay, Helen and redwillow 
and 
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time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
