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Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 1, 2006 9:27:33 GMT -5
Champagne Toast
burnt-orange sunset over city
tranquil waters flow toward beach
sparkling wine poured in glasses
champagne-toast kiss to love
tender hands caress
soft wanton skin
as warm winds
gently
blow
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 1, 2006 9:44:08 GMT -5
here's the definition: A nonet has nine lines. The first line has nine syllables, the second line eight syllables, the third line seven syllables, etc... until line nine that finishes withone syllable. It can be on any subject and rhyming is optional. line 1 -  syllables line 2 - 8 syllables line 3 - 7 syllables line 4 - 6 syllables line 5 - 5 syllables line 6 - 4 syllables line 7 - 3 syllables line 8 - 2 syllables line - 1 syllable |
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Post by Carin on Mar 1, 2006 9:55:57 GMT -5
beautiful, follows the form, love the first line, good title, much enyoyed!
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Post by Charles on Mar 1, 2006 10:20:24 GMT -5
very visually penned, enjoyed!
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Post by Cherrie on Mar 1, 2006 10:29:01 GMT -5
good form and title, nice lines, very well-crafted, great job, Lisa  |
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Post by Dana on Mar 1, 2006 11:23:33 GMT -5
so visual and gently sensual, very nice work
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Post by songbird27 on Mar 1, 2006 11:28:51 GMT -5
I had never heard of this type before. I like the simplicity of the poem, the images are great.
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Post by rrw on Mar 1, 2006 13:32:56 GMT -5
Yeah, I'm with Song. I like the sound of this style. Very interesting structure. I might try my hand at it too.
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Post by Alicia on Mar 1, 2006 20:21:50 GMT -5
yeah I agree, great imagery, very peacful write
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Post by MoonMuse on Mar 2, 2006 1:48:19 GMT -5
This is really visual and serene, really beautiful Lisa and well crafted. Excellent form, well done...love it |
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Post by Tina on Mar 2, 2006 7:52:56 GMT -5
this took me right there on the beach, I could almost smell the ocean and feel the warm breezes, very visual and beautiful, true to form, excellent write, Lisa!
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Post by Billy on Mar 2, 2006 17:10:01 GMT -5
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 2, 2006 19:40:43 GMT -5
thanks everyone! I love this type of poetry...
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Post by Jay on Mar 3, 2006 0:07:02 GMT -5
you have done well with this, I like the style and clarity, beautiful and fresh write
one thing I would change the tiltle to "Champagne Toast to Love" just a thought:)
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Post by Brianna on Mar 3, 2006 3:09:14 GMT -5
I echo the others, beautiful form and flow...the images are rich and vivid
I agree with Jay about the title, but of course that's your choice:)
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this is a great write, love the style and form, a job well-done 
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
