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Lisa Arnold
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Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois

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TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 4:20:42 GMT -5

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Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 28, 2006 4:20:42 GMT -5

Currently this is under consideration for online publication...thanks for all the help on this one Evaluation Monitors

TALISMAN

Phantom shadow rises
over sultry city.
Ominous winds
blow cold.

Crooked branches hang
from rotten trees.
Scattered leaves
blow in the breeze.

Murky silhouette
cascades off dense clouds.
Misty rains descend, heavily,
from ebony sky.

In the near distance,
hum of veiled voices,
muffle
piercing scream's
echo.

Vipers slither in the grass.
Steel-gray eyes
search black night
for any avenue of escape.

Edge of dawn soon will rise.
Haunted soul clutches talisman,
crossing muddy waters
over to the other side,
praying life does not end
before morning sunrise.

©2006 Lisa Arnold

dreams echo within...

ciara Echoes Family Member Motivated by Passion Friend of Echoes Posts: 821	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 4:30:32 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ciara on Mar 28, 2006 4:30:32 GMT -5 quiet edge of suspense in this one, Lisa nice opening and closing stanzas I hope it gets published!
	waiting for life to begin

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Riding The Waves

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TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 4:51:45 GMT -5

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Post by Silent-One on Mar 28, 2006 4:51:45 GMT -5

I like this one more and more every time I read it

you really allow the reader to sense waht the character is experiencing, the sheer panic and desperation they feel while struggling to survive, excellent work my dear friend!

I wish you much luck with this:)

Remembering where I was, so I will know where I am going...

Lee Echoes Family Member Lost and Found Friend of Echoes Posts: 580	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 5:38:51 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lee on Mar 28, 2006 5:38:51 GMT -5 much enjoyed the journey of this one good luck with it:)
	seeking to believe

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 8:14:05 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 28, 2006 8:14:05 GMT -5 many thanks Ciara, Harry and Lee I really appreciate the comments
	Last Edit: Mar 28, 2006 8:16:03 GMT -5 by Lisa Arnold dreams echo within...

MoonMuse Echoes Family Member Living Dead Girl Posts: 3,575	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 8:59:28 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by MoonMuse on Mar 28, 2006 8:59:28 GMT -5 Very visual and rich in detail and imagery. Congrats on the publication, excellent write Lisa
	Nightlife calls me. Through her I am free. It's the only way to be, all caught up in a mystery! Born with full moon fever, I can make you a believer! For I am the moonchild, truly born to be wild! [/color] [/center]

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 21:34:46 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 28, 2006 21:34:46 GMT -5 thanks for your kind wrods Moon! it hasnt been published yet, it's under consideration, but maybe you had a premonition, lol
	dreams echo within...

Carin Writer's Resources Monitor Friend of Echoes Angel-Girl Posts: 806	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 22:19:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Carin on Mar 28, 2006 22:19:56 GMT -5 flows well, vivid images I really like these sections: Crooked branches hang from rotten trees. Scattered leaves blow in the breeze. Murky silhouette cascades off dense clouds. Misty rains descend, heavily, from ebony sky.
	"Looking within to find my soul"

Brian Echoes Family Member LonePoet Friend of Echoes Searching for my mind Posts: 1,140	TALISMAN Mar 28, 2006 23:08:06 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Brian on Mar 28, 2006 23:08:06 GMT -5 nice work, Lisa
	"Trying to succeed"

rrw Echoes Family Member You gotta move Posts: 5,998	TALISMAN Mar 29, 2006 0:17:43 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rrw on Mar 29, 2006 0:17:43 GMT -5 Yeah, Lisa, this really works for the piece. Very clean, stark images, very haunting. Good luck with the consideration.

ken Echoes Senior Member Am I Awake? Friend of Echoes Walter Mosley (writer) Posts: 465	TALISMAN Mar 29, 2006 0:48:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ken on Mar 29, 2006 0:48:56 GMT -5 I agree with everyone else, nice write indeed good luck with it!

icee Echoes Family Member Veiled Emotions Friend of Echoes striving and reaching Posts: 661	TALISMAN Mar 29, 2006 14:33:38 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by icee on Mar 29, 2006 14:33:38 GMT -5 well-executed, nice sense of story, enjoyed the read:)
	give of your soul

Eddie Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Am I here? Posts: 860	TALISMAN Mar 30, 2006 6:44:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Eddie on Mar 30, 2006 6:44:35 GMT -5 very nice, haunting style, build well, nice open ended summation good luck with it!

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TALISMAN Mar 30, 2006 9:14:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 30, 2006 9:14:14 GMT -5 thanks so much Carin, Brian, rrw, Ken, icee and Eddie!
	dreams echo within...

Helen Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Bright and Polite Posts: 565	TALISMAN Mar 31, 2006 16:42:14 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Helen on Mar 31, 2006 16:42:14 GMT -5 enjoyed this one Lisa, sometimes we have to believe and take a chance, nice work!
	"Reaching for my goals"