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Post by hudini on Oct 14, 2007 3:25:35 GMT -5
An unknown stone in a lifeless pit,
he's an ordinary man with an automatic soul.
Bloodshot eyes with deep red streaks,
wavy furry brows and pale, lifeless, cheeks.
A separated spirit from a cold misty skin,
formerly adorned by the life that lived within.
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Oct 14, 2007 4:19:08 GMT -5
I like the frst two lines, thanks for posting
good rhyme
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Post by The Great Fulcanelli on Jan 9, 2012 0:21:36 GMT -5
Hauntingly surreal, yet...was this a self-portrait?
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Post by johan on Jan 9, 2012 11:44:17 GMT -5
Very welcome to Echoes if I have not said before, enjoyed this piece, very readable.
Johan
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Post by rrw on Jan 9, 2012 12:18:13 GMT -5
H, welcome to the site. This is a splendid portrait... the imagery is deeply layered... and very richly rendered. Summing up a person's whole life in a few words is difficult... but you pull it off here.
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Post by purplespirit on Jan 9, 2012 12:43:09 GMT -5
A clear picture of a life span pulled together in brief, also a sharp picture that leaves lots of thoughts, thank you and welcome to Echoes. Ulla xx
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echoes, hope you all are doing well 
