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Post by backstreetdreamer on Nov 17, 2011 9:12:21 GMT -5
Where she lay down there was no light, a pinpoint of infinite night That seemed to reach out nonetheless between each page of emptiness, And yet her eyes were sanctified, two spectral entities that plied The edges of eternity like angels on an endless sea, Immersed in shade they slowly drift, the sands of time were their own gift Through age on age, through thought on thought yet still the dream could not be caught.
Night’s rosary lay by her side As through her fingers, glass beads glide Like fingers on some ancient clock The keys to life’s eternal lock, Releasing every rhythmic note That keeps the song of souls afloat, And at the limits of her reach She saw a book upon a beach That opened as she breathed soft sighs And on a page, no where or whys , But dreams that stared right back at her And made her heart begin to stir.
She tried to come back from the dark But all its shades had made their mark, So she came back another way Through tunnels to a distant day That made her shield her eyes again From rainbow bridges on the rain, Yet some Prayers call out from the night For dreams of gold and silver bright, As she cast runes and sang strange tunes Remembering the long gone moons That lit her way to where she slept Sometimes dreams are a promise kept…
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Post by jbstillwater on Nov 17, 2011 19:11:03 GMT -5
Wow...very much enjoyed this one, magical and your last line was so special. Good writing
Jan
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 18, 2011 3:33:28 GMT -5
fantastic writing Keith!
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Post by johan on Nov 18, 2011 8:21:12 GMT -5
Absolutely great written piece by you Keith, always enjoy your poetry my friend.
Johan
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Post by Lola on Nov 18, 2011 10:11:12 GMT -5
stunning write, thanks for the great read
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Post by michaelgallatin on Nov 18, 2011 13:04:17 GMT -5
Beautiful, soft, sweet and I think, ethereal. Keith, I don't believe I've ever offered a criticism or suggestion. Dear Sir, your work never needs it. Yet this time I'd suggest a change to verse two, line three. Clocks don't have fingers, they have hands and you wouldn't need to use the word "fingers" twice. How about, "Like hands upon some ancient clock". Still works well with the poem. But just a thought and totally up to you my friend!
Take care, Mike
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Post by purplespirit on Nov 18, 2011 16:08:22 GMT -5
A absolute delight is this poem Keith. While it aloud to take the perfect rhyme and rhythm in, suddenly tears did well up. It is so beautiful, thank you! Ulla xx
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Post by Billy on Nov 19, 2011 23:57:59 GMT -5
wonderfully penned!
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Post by Sierra on Nov 20, 2011 8:05:25 GMT -5
beautiful poetry, just marvelous!
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Post by heart2heart on Nov 21, 2011 0:34:36 GMT -5
Well you certainly haven't lost your touch since I've been away Keith, so delightful to read you again. Katriona
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Post by ciara on Nov 22, 2011 1:15:42 GMT -5
outstanding poetry!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 27, 2011 15:11:50 GMT -5
had to read ths one again dear Keith, beautiful writing...thanks again for the post!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 28, 2011 6:35:51 GMT -5
::)again a great piece...ENJOY your award
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Post by johan on Nov 28, 2011 8:41:47 GMT -5
A really great return on your poetry Keith, absolutely worth any award my friend.
Johan
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Post by Reggie on Nov 28, 2011 9:48:53 GMT -5
wonderful job CONGRATS on POTD!
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