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Post by rrw on Jul 7, 2008 14:00:27 GMT -5
Shall I deny to you a sacred song, While I myself by right am free to sing With battered notes the youthful call to spring? Why should your voice be mute? Come sing along. Yes, truly right for me, for you quite wrong To voice your spirit’s pride, to now grab wing Upon the melody your love doth bring. Does not the woman feel her love as strong? A man may dabble here and there with dreams Less pure than your sweet tongue that calls my name And not a word defiled shall taunt his schemes, For you shall always be the one to blame. And though I am a man, or so it seems, Your equal right to love I shouldn’t shame.
* Okay I may work on this some more... This was HARD!
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Post by heart2heart on Jul 7, 2008 17:44:01 GMT -5
Yes I know dear friend, but we need something like this to keep our little greys in action The best of Gaelic luck to you ! Heart2Heart
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Post by rainbowrider on Jul 7, 2008 20:57:49 GMT -5
A romancer of words, most enjoyable,
RR
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 7, 2008 22:40:33 GMT -5
I enjoyed this!
thanks for your effort, much luck to you!
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Post by johan on Jul 8, 2008 4:10:47 GMT -5
Great job, as always Rob.
Johan
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Post by rrw on Jul 8, 2008 10:45:29 GMT -5
Thanks, guys! Good luck to all!
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Post by immusie on Jul 8, 2008 13:08:27 GMT -5
Well rrw, I AGREE WHOLE heartedly...this was a most difficult challenge, and I was very tempted NOT to enter it....I never do Sonnet's because they are so difficult, particularly not of the Italian type...I too had a great deal of difficulty and still don't know if I got it right...but entered anyway....I thought this one was very well done, and with a bit of the Shakespearean flare....nice job and Good luck to you as well my friend.....musie
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Post by aquarianstar on Jul 9, 2008 17:31:00 GMT -5
Oh my gosh, yes it was really hard. Especially if you're not used to sonnets, like me... But I didn't feel any of the difficulties in this piece!! It's beautiful, engaging, on topic, nicely formed, and... I don't know.. just.. really... sonnet-y. lol... It's just everything I'd expect, and some that I wouldn't... which is good!! Good luck mon ami
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Post by rrw on Jul 10, 2008 13:28:02 GMT -5
Oh my gosh, yes it was really hard. Especially if you're not used to sonnets, like me... But I didn't feel any of the difficulties in this piece!! It's beautiful, engaging, on topic, nicely formed, and... I don't know.. just.. really... sonnet-y. lol... It's just everything I'd expect, and some that I wouldn't... which is good!! Good luck mon ami Thanks, Aqua. I rewrote it a bit to get the "proper" ending.
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Post by b4sunset on Jul 10, 2008 14:53:08 GMT -5
OOOH, now you're talking, feeling romance, RRW! whew, terrific!
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Post by rrw on Jul 13, 2008 15:21:11 GMT -5
Thanks, All for the comments! Good luck!
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Post by stephen on Jul 15, 2008 6:18:48 GMT -5
Great Petrarchan SL
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