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Post by cdlight on Feb 23, 2009 9:26:53 GMT -5
 I just thought this was beautiful picture that was worth the words...enjoy...CD |
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Post by sunny on Feb 23, 2009 10:24:53 GMT -5
I just thought this was beautiful picture that was worth the words...enjoy...CD CD!!! this is sooooooooooooo beautiful ! I love it!!! oh....I want to try it!!!! what rules I have to follow??? well because you say that... maybe I try it first... then fix later on.. oh, by the way.. I wan to say heartfelt thanks to your help yesterday! and all of your notes and teachings are incredible!!! and that take so much work?  ??!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thanks CD, I will write you a thanks poem to you later on ok... and GIVE YOU A BIG BIG THANKS OK!!!! a hug :Dyou for a thank for now! |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 23, 2009 10:53:29 GMT -5
no rules...just write
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Post by sunny on Feb 23, 2009 11:56:20 GMT -5
wait till your footsteps here
I flow as I float
Gracefully I flow like gleams of glows
As if a nature's silky robe
For you, I shine with green jade and gold!
Wait till your footsteps near
I’ll veil on your shoulders and toes...
I ly as I smile
Patiently I ly with many silent leafy piles
Spread out tenderly in miles
For you, my embers burn passionately wild
Wait till your footsteps upon
I'll caress your gentle feet in nature style
I set as I rest
softly I unfold my bushes shrubs nest
spinning for the Guest
for you, my branches dance for the best
wait till your footsteps close
I'll swift you up dearly and lose your breath
I weep in my midst
quietly I drift down many crystal beads
drops of morning mist
for you, my silvery fogs linger and seek
wait till your footsteps here
I'll engulf you with torrents of dewy kiss! [/color][/b] |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 23, 2009 13:40:34 GMT -5
I really like the structure you have here...flowing yet rapid and slow... Good write Sunny
CD
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Post by heart2heart on Feb 23, 2009 15:22:03 GMT -5
The tranquil place Walk in the woods when darkness halts The birds' endearing prayer Where fragrance of the woodbine seeps Into the cooling air Sit on a bench surrounded by trees Thick-growing year by year Listen to sighing winds, and sense The magic atmosphere Then, if tomorrow brings you gloom Recall this tranquil place Serene as Mother Nature planned Unspoiled by human race.... |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 23, 2009 16:10:01 GMT -5
Well Done...reminds me of Maine
CD
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Post by heart2heart on Feb 23, 2009 16:22:14 GMT -5
You've seen the light in this one sweet Sunny. I loved your poem, exquisite m'dear, your poetry gets better every day ! H2H  wait till your footsteps here
I flow as I float
Gracefully I flow like gleams of glows
As if a nature's silky robe
For you, I shine with green jade and gold!
Wait till your footsteps near
I’ll veil on your shoulders and toes...
I ly as I smile
Patiently I ly with many silent leafy piles
Spread out tenderly in miles
For you, my embers burn passionately wild
Wait till your footsteps upon
I'll caress your gentle feet in nature style
I set as I rest
softly I unfold my bushes shrubs nest
spinning for the Guest
for you, my branches dance for the best
wait till your footsteps close
I'll swift you up dearly and lose your breath
I weep in my midst
quietly I drift down many crystal beads
drops of morning mist
for you, my silvery fogs linger and seek
wait till your footsteps here
I'll engulf you with torrents of dewy kiss! [/color][/b] [/quote] |
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Post by heart2heart on Feb 23, 2009 16:25:38 GMT -5
Strange you should say that, I was in Maine in 2004, and I must say it's one of the most beautiful places I've ever been. I hold a fascination for lighthouses, and on that trip I saw so many wonderful ones, was a holiday in a million  In fact I've been dreaming of buying a derelict one and renovating it, I know there are lighthouses for sale in Britain and Norway where I stay. We shall see, at least I can dream Heart2Heart Well Done...reminds me of Maine CD |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 23, 2009 16:29:13 GMT -5
I went to High School in Maine...It's called Vacation Land for a reason |
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Post by sunny on Feb 24, 2009 0:58:50 GMT -5
I really like the structure you have here...flowing yet rapid and slow... Good write Sunny CD really? so how is the rhyming thing you teach me about ? am I get it or not? CD? thanks! huggyou!!! now you wake me up! |
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Post by heart2heart on Feb 24, 2009 1:11:06 GMT -5
Sunny, your rhymes are great, toes/glows, piles/miles, rest/nest, sometimes it's not even necessary to have exactly the same rhyming word, a hint will sometimes give the same effect in a freestyle write for instance. I'll help you with anything you wish, just mail me Heart2Heart wait till your footsteps here
I flow as I float
Gracefully I flow like gleams of glows
As if a nature's silky robe
For you, I shine with green jade and gold!
Wait till your footsteps near
I’ll veil on your shoulders and toes...
I ly as I smile
Patiently I ly with many silent leafy piles
Spread out tenderly in miles
For you, my embers burn passionately wild
Wait till your footsteps upon
I'll caress your gentle feet in nature style
I set as I rest
softly I unfold my bushes shrubs nest
spinning for the Guest
for you, my branches dance for the best
wait till your footsteps close
I'll swift you up dearly and lose your breath
I weep in my midst
quietly I drift down many crystal beads
drops of morning mist
for you, my silvery fogs linger and seek
wait till your footsteps here
I'll engulf you with torrents of dewy kiss! [/color][/b] [/quote] |
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Post by heart2heart on Feb 24, 2009 1:12:36 GMT -5
PS: have to go to work now though, back this afternoon, OK ? Katriona |
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Post by sunny on Feb 24, 2009 1:20:21 GMT -5
You've seen the light in this one sweet Sunny. I loved your poem, exquisite m'dear, your poetry gets better every day ! H2H wait till your footsteps here
I flow as I float
Gracefully I flow like gleams of glows
As if a nature's silky robe
For you, I shine with green jade and gold!
Wait till your footsteps near
I’ll veil on your shoulders and toes...
I ly as I smile
Patiently I ly with many silent leafy piles
Spread out tenderly in miles
For you, my embers burn passionately wild
Wait till your footsteps upon
I'll caress your gentle feet in nature style
I set as I rest
softly I unfold my bushes shrubs nest
spinning for the Guest
for you, my branches dance for the best
wait till your footsteps close
I'll swift you up dearly and lose your breath
I weep in my midst
quietly I drift down many crystal beads
drops of morning mist
for you, my silvery fogs linger and seek
wait till your footsteps here
I'll engulf you with torrents of dewy kiss! [/color][/b] [/quote][/quote] Thank you Heart2Heart! Your poem is also very very nice! I too like yours! and specially I regret on the way to work when think back my poem --- that in my poem I forget to mention about the bench which it has in your poem... that is such a sensitive element which I love to have it in! but..... uh... I was too much in hurry in the end... and I just didn't think about it... anyway, love yours Heart2heart... love your different perspective expression! with you, and with many other good teachers here... I shall humbly clam all my good inspirations poems give birth - are because of poet like you, and like many others in Echo... who influence me, guided me, navigated me and strengthen me, carrying me with all of your mastery wings and wind! Thanks again H2H! |
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Post by sunny on Feb 24, 2009 1:24:44 GMT -5
The tranquil place Walk in the woods when darkness halts The birds' endearing prayer Where fragrance of the woodbine seeps Into the cooling air Sit on a bench surrounded by trees Thick-growing year by year Listen to sighing winds, and sense The magic atmosphere Then, if tomorrow brings you gloom Recall this tranquil place Serene as Mother Nature planned Unspoiled by human race.... |
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In fact I've been dreaming of buying a derelict one and renovating it, I know there are lighthouses for sale in Britain and Norway where I stay. We shall see, at least I can dream 
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echoes, hope you all are doing well 
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