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Post by immusie on Mar 28, 2009 22:10:13 GMT -5
Okay...this is a kaiku follow the leader by starting out your first line by using the last line of the person ahead of you....
Warmth of the sun sets
over the yawning ocean
waves begin to wane
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Post by sunny on Mar 29, 2009 6:38:57 GMT -5
Okay...this is a kaiku follow the leader by starting out your first line by using the last line of the person ahead of you.... Warmth of the sun sets over the yawning ocean waves begin to wane
rushing toward the faint light
catch the last breath |
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Post by immusie on Mar 29, 2009 13:10:48 GMT -5
Hi sunny...it's good but the last line only had 4 syllables....how about Catching "the last breath"?
Catching the last breath
is the days end of the sun
a new dawn is nigh
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Post by sunny on Mar 29, 2009 17:42:44 GMT -5
Hi sunny...it's good but the last line only had 4 syllables....how about Catching "the last breath"? Catching the last breath is the days end of the sun a new dawn is nigh Yes! you are right! I am soooo sorry! ok... I go change it ok! and by the way, what is "nigh"? it is night? or "high"? but anyway, I will just do copy and paste and leave the way it is ok.. thanks musie! |
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Post by sunny on Mar 29, 2009 17:43:56 GMT -5
waves begin to wane
rushing toward the faint light
catching the last breath thanks musie! 
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Post by sunny on Mar 29, 2009 17:58:35 GMT -5
a new dawn is nigh
breeze softly dancing with reeds
a dew drop fallen  |
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Post by cdlight on Mar 31, 2009 14:46:03 GMT -5
a new drop fallen
from fatigue holding on to
a distant lover
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Post by immusie on Mar 31, 2009 16:58:19 GMT -5
a distant lover
sings a melodious song
from on mountain high
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Post by sunny on Mar 31, 2009 21:58:47 GMT -5
from on mountain high
bursting to brilliant sunsets
burning all oceans
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Post by immusie on Apr 2, 2009 7:40:17 GMT -5
 burning all oceans
sunny spectrum of rainbows
dipping and diving |
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Post by cdlight on Apr 2, 2009 13:46:22 GMT -5
dipping and diving
choc'late tempts fresh strawberries
meeting lustful lips
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Post by sunny on Apr 2, 2009 22:13:02 GMT -5
 meeting lustful lips
warm icecream slowly drifting
never feel enough |
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Post by cdlight on Apr 3, 2009 9:09:15 GMT -5
last line has a 4 count...revise please
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Post by sunny on Apr 3, 2009 14:09:55 GMT -5
last line has a 4 count...revise please opps! Thanks CD!  I change it. |
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Post by immusie on Apr 5, 2009 13:03:31 GMT -5
Sunny...how about "never get enough"?
never get enough
of a joy filled April day
the sun is shining
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I change it.
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
