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Lisa Arnold
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A poem Nov 23, 2004 4:57:24 GMT -5

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Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 23, 2004 4:57:24 GMT -5

Here's one of my older poems, let me know whatcha think ;D

UNKNOWN

Deep behind your desolate eyes rests profound misery.
On your handsome face is the ominous pressence
of internal torment you've suffered for much of your life.

When I asked if you were as lonely as I am I hear
painful sorrow riding on the rasp of your broken voice
as you whisper something I cannot quite comprehend.

Your pensive dark eyes glare through me
as your trembling hand struggles to brush away
the lone tear streaming down your distraught face.

I do not dare try to comfort you for fear
my embrace would not be enough to soothe
sorrow wrestling within your broken being.

For a brief moment I long to know who you are, but I am
afraid to reach out to you. I am too scarred to try to love.
My heart can no longer tolerate this kind of anguish or pain.

I sense graveness churning in your troubled soul,
but I cannot rescue you and force myself to accept
your life story will forever remain unknown.

©2004 Lisa Arnold

Last Edit: Nov 23, 2004 5:00:19 GMT -5 by Lisa Arnold

dreams echo within...

Tina Lounge Moderator[/size] Finding Inner Peace Chasing Echoes Posts: 1,142	A poem Nov 23, 2004 5:58:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Tina on Nov 23, 2004 5:58:45 GMT -5 Hey Lisa, I really like this one, it reminds me of a long time ago Nice work
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Sharon Assistant Administrator[/size] Believe and Achieve Posts: 2,430	A poem Nov 23, 2004 6:05:50 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sharon on Nov 23, 2004 6:05:50 GMT -5 I am liking ths one too. Kinda sad, but very profound. It certainly has an element of mystery to it. Thanks for sharing it wth us
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Helen Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Bright and Polite Posts: 565	A poem Nov 23, 2004 6:26:38 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Helen on Nov 23, 2004 6:26:38 GMT -5 I like it too, Lisa This is my favorite stanza "I do not dare try to comfort you for fear my embrace would not be enough to soothe sorrow wrestling within your broken being."
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	A poem Nov 23, 2004 17:18:09 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 23, 2004 17:18:09 GMT -5 THANKS so much Tina, Sharon and Helen ;D I think I will polish it up a bit and send it to a ezine
	dreams echo within...

Seashellstarz Echoes Family Member If youth is supposed to be of passion and dreams, then I hold somewhat of my youth. Posts: 755	A poem Nov 24, 2004 16:44:16 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Seashellstarz on Nov 24, 2004 16:44:16 GMT -5 Your wording cannot be more appropriate in your poem!
	Everything will be eventually forgotten... and forgiven.

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	A poem Nov 24, 2004 21:37:24 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Nov 24, 2004 21:37:24 GMT -5 Hey Shellz Thanks so much ;D
	Last Edit: Nov 24, 2004 21:38:15 GMT -5 by Lisa Arnold dreams echo within...

Seashellstarz Echoes Family Member If youth is supposed to be of passion and dreams, then I hold somewhat of my youth. Posts: 755	A poem Nov 25, 2004 11:51:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Seashellstarz on Nov 25, 2004 11:51:56 GMT -5 I like how you didn't capitalized some of the words on the first line because they are still part of a sentence. I always capitalize them since I'm such a grammar freak. I should learn to try not capitalize so much next time...
	Everything will be eventually forgotten... and forgiven.

Seashellstarz Echoes Family Member If youth is supposed to be of passion and dreams, then I hold somewhat of my youth. Posts: 755	A poem Nov 25, 2004 12:01:07 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Seashellstarz on Nov 25, 2004 12:01:07 GMT -5 I like your singular style... not a lot of punctuation.
	Everything will be eventually forgotten... and forgiven.

Sheila63 Echoes Full Member Posts: 194	A poem Dec 18, 2004 18:17:38 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sheila63 on Dec 18, 2004 18:17:38 GMT -5 WOW, Lisa, I really like the poem. Very powerful.
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	A poem Dec 18, 2004 21:43:33 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Dec 18, 2004 21:43:33 GMT -5 Sheila I really appreciate you commenting on my poem
	dreams echo within...

countrygalcc Echoes Family Member According to laughter, life's bitter greed gripping waves. Love was the need in death. His bone????? Posts: 1,857	A poem Jan 6, 2005 11:02:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by countrygalcc on Jan 6, 2005 11:02:18 GMT -5 Lisa, I really liked this poem. Very good. You have a good poetic write to you deep inside your soul you have some talent. Thanks!
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Reggie Writing Prompt Moderator[/size] Friend of Echoes Posts: 1,400	A poem Jun 29, 2012 0:28:56 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Reggie on Jun 29, 2012 0:28:56 GMT -5 Hey Lisa I do not think I have ever read this one...I was looking through the back pages and found this gem :Pexcellent poetry wirh good detail and description

Bob Moderator[/size] Haiku Enthusiast! Forever hoping Posts: 2,487	A poem Jun 30, 2012 22:36:33 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Bob on Jun 30, 2012 22:36:33 GMT -5 :'(Hey Lisa, I do not think I have ever read this one either, great job
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Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	A poem Jul 1, 2012 0:16:17 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Jul 1, 2012 0:16:17 GMT -5 ;D Reg and Bob
	dreams echo within...