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Tingle
Feb 11, 2012 19:36:03 GMT -5
Post by brokenfriend23 on Feb 11, 2012 19:36:03 GMT -5
My eyes tingle, Heavy with the weight of the day. Heavy with the palm of pills I take to surrender thought. My mind is busy. It races through. It finds love with which it can’t find success. My eyes are heavy. Maybe they too are surrendering, For chemistry is far too strong. Usually sleep is week. My fingers are not cooperating, the doorman to unconscious control the gilded gates, he so often holds me back. Dick. But let me soon. From topic to topic my brain is restless. Targeted for? It remains elusive. Is this quality? Is this trash? For whom does this text toll? Each day, a step. So long as we are moving, For when don’t communicate our emotions, inside I.die. I have for far too long. The sky tears open and rain gushes through. They never tell you how much work it is. They never tell you the hoops through which to jump. The sky is a royal blue and this merciless week has, at last, Returned to its lair. It will survive. But it will thrash out again. We will have days of torment, turmoil and terror. Yet on magical days the energy of man smiles upon us. In those moments we are whole. We are strong. And there is nothing that will stand in our way. But now, the little friends fog my vision and loose my place. They craze my fingers and numb my toes. They are friends, family and the invaders of evil. They aid me in healing. They help me with the wounds of the day. I will shine. We will be strong. But for now the tingle takes me away.
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Tingle
Feb 12, 2012 13:00:50 GMT -5
Post by michaelgallatin on Feb 12, 2012 13:00:50 GMT -5
More hopeful than the first poem I read and yet still pain here along with a wish for the strength to get through. I'm 63 my new friend, an up and down career, an up and down marriage, an up and down life. Pal, I know this feeling all too well believe me! But if we need pills, booze, excessive food, gambling, foolish and sick sex, etc. just to cope with life, then there's a real problem there. There must be a better way to get by, at least I certainly hope so!
Take care, Mike
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Tingle
Feb 12, 2012 15:12:18 GMT -5
Post by rrw on Feb 12, 2012 15:12:18 GMT -5
BF, this is good story telling... without giving it all away... could be someone getting high... or someone taking medication for cancer... or some other medical reason... there are some typos you should look at and a few phrases that threw me of a bit, but overall, this is solid writing.
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Tingle
Feb 13, 2012 12:47:41 GMT -5
Post by purplespirit on Feb 13, 2012 12:47:41 GMT -5
Not an easy read for me but I can feel the plea either for health or for an end to "addiction". Partly powerful and partly difficult, still it is a great work, thank you. Ulla xx
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