So Logical...

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

hey been away for few weeks. i have been working on picking a university to attend since feb. 2011, a professor at a university recommended me for a government pell grant, a corporation tax break grant, and a government tution tax grant. it is a lot of money when all three are combined. 24,000 dollars a year total. this teacher saw several dozens of my writings on religion, poetry, spiritual short shories on the internet and he sees potential in me lol. so i enrolled in a online school called ivy college in tiffon in toledo ohio. because of him i am enrolled to get a general arts accociate degree. my bachlors degrees will be in art/ web design and minor in literature. so now you know why haven't been on forum much over last week or so.. been busy finding all the preperation stuff for school. got my transcript, identification, had to finalize the documentation ID both ways for all three grants. tomorro morning i will have help picling out claasses and i will get my books friday or saturday.

So Logical…

When I was very young I
thought I was so logical.

At that age I believed I
would have many lovers
and then get married.

Actually I only had two
lovers and one sweetheart.

In the future I will have eight
wonderful lovers. In my heart
the divine showed me a image
of this while I was praying.

A month after our marriage a
tragedy happened and I became
disabled. Soon after this she left.

I was heart broken and mad at
God. My life has a void in it
and I am living in a massive
pile of tangled up weeds now.

What can I really truly do?

I reside in a nursing domicile
praying everyday that I will
still have a computer that
functions. I realize my money
is all gone and I am seeking
deliverance from my infirmities.

Maybe in another life I will be
blessed for enduring all the
baloney thrown at me in this life.

All I want is love just
like everyone else.

173 words 30 lines

[michaelgallatin]

Not sure if this is so much a poem as it is a statement of where you've gone in life following one about where you're at now. I'm not criticizing it at all and I suppose in a way it is a free verse poem of your life if presented as such. It honestly doesn't matter. And I'm so glad I used that word, honest. Because that's what shines here the most; honesty, humility, caring, hope and a search for love and a better life. You were certainly dealt some crap but my friend, you seem to be turning it into a positive outlook on making something of yourself and your life. Not everyone has that courage! Good luck!

Namaste,
Mike

PS - Do me a huge favor and read and comment on my poem, Living In My Dreams. So far nobody has and I'd appreciate the feedback. Thank you!

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

hi Michael,

i don' disagree with how you interpret this at all. i tend to write prose poetry more then poems. i consider this to be free verse prose format with similies in it.

many people have very opinionated views on what poems are. many think it has to rhyme or they do not consider it a poem at all. this one is a work in progress with me. this issixth vesion of it. i am working on a seventh version of this one.

i do tend to write free verse most of the time, but i do experiemnt with ryhmeing and metered poetry which i try to compose but i do get help with those from friends that i do write with. on those type poems i do get construcytive feedback on.

i use a few of the poet "carl sandburg" poems that are free verse to base and mirror many of my poems on which i orchestrate. i have received very much feedbak on this one about how to make this a better poem. one verse is critical the 7th verse and when i changed it in my prose poem it changed how you look a this.

any poem you ever went more attention paid to it just give me a holler. i am working on preparing for school or i would have responded on several more poems here the last three days. i have noticed it hs been slow here the last few weeks here. and also this poem is several years old.

and thank you for responding to this one

victor <smiles>

[purplespirit]

This certainly is a poem that reports the path of your life and it is a very sad "report" but I think writing about it all is kind of help for you to cope with the hurt that still is saved deep within you. To me it appears admirable that you didn't let it all get you down, you are strong in deciding your future and this is a example way, thank you. Ulla xx

[The Great Fulcanelli]

Sorry to hear about your troubles. But I say to you, never give up on life....yet.

[purplespirit]

Good to see you back Victor, you have been missed!! From the heart I wish you good luck in all your new achievements, take care and I hope to read you again some time soon. Blessings! Ulla xx

[rrw]

Poetry is wide open as to what it is these days. For it's the use of phrasing, imagery using a sense of rhythm that conveys the experience of idea... at least in my mind... there's room for much. I just finished a semester of creative writing (focus on poetry) online. I foind a craft book that I found to be just wonderfully inspiring: Nine Gates by Jane Hirshfield. The class also had us read collections by contemporary Poets: My favorites were: Patricia Smith Molly Peacock and Mark Jarman.

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

thank-you everyone for for respondinding. Thank you rrw for you most keen obseving insight. I have been recommended this book before. I will give it a lookse soon.

Selah-vai Larsen M. Callirhoe

[rrw]

Jan 26, 2012 21:10:32 GMT -5 Larsen M. Callirhoe said:

thank-you everyone for for respondinding. Thank you rrw for you most keen obseving insight. I have been recommended this book before. I will give it a lookse soon.

Selah-vai Larsen M. Callirhoe

You might also look for: The Triggering Town by Richard Hugo and Walking Light by Stephen Dunn... gets the creative juices flowing.