TREACHEROUS WATERS

Betty
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TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 0:50:55 GMT -5

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Post by Betty on Apr 4, 2010 0:50:55 GMT -5

treacherous waters
engulf
a longing soul
rendering it vulnerable
to defeat

hidden within
a callous heart
waits desire
for a comforting
hand

yet, another night
falls without
rescue from these
treacherous
waters

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Last Edit: Apr 4, 2010 2:56:11 GMT -5 by Betty

Lisa Arnold Administrator Founder Belief is Power! Within a winter's shadow rests mourning's light"...the human soul cannot be permanently chained." - W.E.B. DuBois Believe in You! Posts: 16,456	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 0:59:32 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 4, 2010 0:59:32 GMT -5 Hi Betty, This is very well-written. Good use of tone, imagery and emotion I enjoyed the read, great job Thanks for posting
	Last Edit: Apr 4, 2010 1:00:45 GMT -5 by Lisa Arnold dreams echo within...

ciara Echoes Family Member Motivated by Passion Friend of Echoes Posts: 821	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 1:13:25 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ciara on Apr 4, 2010 1:13:25 GMT -5 love this! this is my favorite section: "treacherous waters engulf a longing soul rendering it vulnerable to defeat" great job on this Betty!
	waiting for life to begin

Lola Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Michelle Obama Posts: 753	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 1:39:06 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lola on Apr 4, 2010 1:39:06 GMT -5 good job with this write Betty,it is very well-expressed!

Joan Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Posts: 863	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 1:41:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Joan on Apr 4, 2010 1:41:39 GMT -5 this is good a great poem all around

Sierra Echoes Family Member Posts: 847	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:17:41 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sierra on Apr 4, 2010 2:17:41 GMT -5 Betty, your poem well depicts the desire for "rescue" from loneliness...this is a fine write!

trina Echoes Family Member Barely Surviving Friend of Echoes Ntozake Shange Posts: 802	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:24:28 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by trina on Apr 4, 2010 2:24:28 GMT -5 your brief poem speaks volumes, well-done! love this part: within a callous heart hides desire for a comforting hand
	there is no greater power than love of oneself

rico Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Posts: 542	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:32:38 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rico on Apr 4, 2010 2:32:38 GMT -5 Dear Betty, I echo what the others have said, this is fine writing!

Dana Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes beginning again Posts: 983	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:36:47 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Dana on Apr 4, 2010 2:36:47 GMT -5 great little gem of a poem, Betty!

Betty Haiku/Short Form Monitor[/size] Posts: 1,477	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:46:00 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Betty on Apr 4, 2010 2:46:00 GMT -5 Apr 4, 2010 0:59:32 GMT -5 Lisa Arnold said: Hi Betty, This is very well-written. Good use of tone, imagery and emotion I enjoyed the read, great job Thanks for posting Hey Lisa so much

Betty Haiku/Short Form Monitor[/size] Posts: 1,477	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:47:45 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Betty on Apr 4, 2010 2:47:45 GMT -5 thanks ciara, glad you enjoyed my poem! many thanks Lola and Joan, trina, rico and dana!!

Betty Haiku/Short Form Monitor[/size] Posts: 1,477	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 2:49:22 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Betty on Apr 4, 2010 2:49:22 GMT -5 Apr 4, 2010 2:17:41 GMT -5 Sierra said: Betty, your poem well depicts the desire for "rescue" from loneliness...this is a fine write! Sierra, I used to feel this way and then one day I learned to rescue myself
	Last Edit: Apr 4, 2010 2:49:58 GMT -5 by Betty

rainbowrider Echoes Family Member nature's own Posts: 1,540	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 10:01:42 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by rainbowrider on Apr 4, 2010 10:01:42 GMT -5 A look to the heart in the soul of times, so well expressed, RR
	A rainbow is a bridge between then and now Its colors are for love its promise a sacred vow

Silent-One Echoes Family Member Friend of Echoes Riding The Waves Posts: 659	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 10:10:25 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Silent-One on Apr 4, 2010 10:10:25 GMT -5 very soulful write, this is a winner Betty!
	Remembering where I was, so I will know where I am going...

Cyndi Echoes Senior Member Catch My FallFriend of Echoes Seen but Unheard Posts: 362	TREACHEROUS WATERS Apr 4, 2010 10:22:53 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Cyndi on Apr 4, 2010 10:22:53 GMT -5 great poem and title, I surely can relate to this one, good job!