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Post by cdlight on Feb 18, 2009 13:09:17 GMT -5
Good write Sunny... in the future you will need to reply when you have read the topic and before starting the challenge. I can't tell how long it is taking you to wirte these...that is the whole purpose of the challenge...to write a poem on any topic in less than two hours...
The next topic is...race against time
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Post by sunny on Feb 18, 2009 22:25:18 GMT -5
Good write Sunny... in the future you will need to reply when you have read the topic and before starting the challenge. I can't tell how long it is taking you to wirte these...that is the whole purpose of the challenge...to write a poem on any topic in less than two hours... The next topic is...race against time Hi CD, I am so sorry about that... I guess I have not do that to reply first. sorry. well... if those poems that you can not count the time.. that is ok with me... I don't mind CD.. I just feel having good time to share poems and it is so much fun you know.. so you can just start to count this one ok... forget about those I write before and as if they are just there to company friends whom ever would come to read ok. ok... then, I start to write this one ok. I hope you don't mind that I didn't follow your rules before those few poems, ok? hugss to you! let 's just count this one.... ok CD. I have just read your time here is 11:25 pm... so I guess I start to write at 11:30 pm ok? hugs! |
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Post by sunny on Feb 18, 2009 23:13:43 GMT -5
 race against timeWe cry by the river band, with sadden evening wind three of us tearing together, as the river howling by they will leave the country tomorrow, leave only I alone here with the same river, both we leave behind evening hours fly, as if the running of the time friends we sit by the table, cheers with rich wine to cheer for a better tomorrow, to cheer for tonight as if we make the most of our joys, to race against time... years are passing by, now I am here to live and locate friends are far away, some are on the earth other side through books and poetries my mind walks long ways meet friends through silent words, like race against time... river is still running in my mind, same as the busying time I live through books and live through write, all part of life body can only live and decay, but mind can live beyond lights I 'll savor friendships and cherish life, to race against time... image:http://i387.photobucket.com |
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Post by b4sunset on Feb 19, 2009 1:24:48 GMT -5
Do i have dementia today, CD.. but, but... what's the next topic.. sunny pal's gift is a wow! teacher, what do i do next-- from your ADHD pupil, b4..  |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 19, 2009 2:04:16 GMT -5
Well done Sunny...no worries my friend...you did that in just under an hour...good job
I love the line "meet friends through silent words, like race against time..." Never really though of writing as silent words...made me smile...thanks for the new perspective.
CD
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Post by cdlight on Feb 19, 2009 2:05:08 GMT -5
Next Topic...Secret Chapters Speak Volumes
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Post by b4sunset on Feb 19, 2009 3:00:43 GMT -5
Secret Chapters Speak Volumes
all her pages have been soiled in
twighlight's stacatto refrain,
in the secret passages of a moon done
and undone. and of what blood she splaterred
upon shadows with gods, urchins and empty halls,
as if, her wandering spirit never lusted for
holier days, or even nights... scum of the
earth, bile of rivers she. only,
she traveled on chapters of lives unseen
unheard by mortals no braver than
normal circumstance. she crowns herself with all
the sins of dark refuge; she is after all,
darkness breathing real, plump light
(done, 15 minutes??)
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Post by sunny on Feb 19, 2009 7:59:53 GMT -5
Well done Sunny...no worries my friend...you did that in just under an hour...good job I love the line "meet friends through silent words, like race against time..." Never really though of writing as silent words...made me smile...thanks for the new perspective. CD Thanks CD!!!! I am so happy!!!!!!!!!!!!  You make my day!!!  so you like the silent words? haaaaaaaaaaaa..... that is why I love Echo my friend! because all the beautiful silent words here are as if from hearts of poets and angels... ever since warm my heart and soul!!! and give me the most beautiful feelings that I ever have from life! for thank your wonderful idea of this fun write my friend, here I put down more slilent words for you and to thank you and also to bring you warmth and smile as your words to me too ok! here it comes! bunch of them!!!  ok.. now I go on your new topic ok.. let's count the time... I can not possibly faster than B4!!! she is flying!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! so unfare b4!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! because I can not fly my Pal!!! haaaaaaaaaaaaa... |
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Post by sunny on Feb 19, 2009 8:02:47 GMT -5
Next Topic...Secret Chapters Speak Volumes  I start now. ( you said that I need to reply first right?) bunch silent words again! haaaaaaaaaaaaaaa... ok.. I am going! 123! go! |
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Post by sunny on Feb 19, 2009 8:08:59 GMT -5
Secret Chapters Speak VolumesI have called your name before I was born that sweet melody have always in my mind ever since I can speak and sing some songs you are always in my heart days and nights the language we speak no one can hear the flowers and roses we grow no one can see only God and angels are with us so near for letting us enter heavenly garden roam and see... Oh! my secret half of my heart and soul as if God and angels put us to earthy land we lose each other from time to time that flows but for always we sing with love and dance when winter days you bring me summer lights warm through my being with sunsets rays when rian and storm you tenderly hug me tight for heaven and earth no home like you gave Oh! I love you more than everything in earth or sky! I call your name every second days and nights let my silent volumes embrace your heart and mind with God and angels we go beyond time and lights! |
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Post by b4sunset on Feb 20, 2009 0:46:01 GMT -5
ey, sunny pal.. you write even better when there is a time limit.. i do spontaneous writing to access my raw self, then edit.. what a superb, profound gift! yes!
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Post by sunny on Feb 20, 2009 9:40:42 GMT -5
ey, sunny pal.. you write even better when there is a time limit.. i do spontaneous writing to access my raw self, then edit.. what a superb, profound gift! yes! hugs my b4 Pal! heeeeee.... thank you for your kind saying my Pal... I love to write in time limit... heeee it feels something is coming out of your heart just right on your lips that have waited for a while to come out if we take time to think and think again... haaaa.. sometimes when we think ... some words of heart and soul have just swallowed back in to our stomach... and no way to come out till next time... haaaaaaaaaa.. but humbly I don't think it fits superb or profound such words.. I also do edit sometimes after finish... and feels not fit what I want to say... I am just learning from you and others and it is just so very fun my Pal!!! thanks again for your kind comment!!! hugsss you for making me high just now!!!! |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 21, 2009 0:06:58 GMT -5
race against timeWe cry by the river band, with sadden evening wind three of us tearing together, as the river howling by they will leave the country tomorrow, leave only I alone here with the same river, both we leave behind evening hours fly, as if the running of the time friends we sit by the table, cheers with rich wine to cheer for a better tomorrow, to cheer for tonight as if we make the most of our joys, to race against time... years are passing by, now I am here to live and locate friends are far away, some are on the earth other side through books and poetries my mind walks long ways meet friends through silent words, like race against time... river is still running in my mind, same as the busying time I live through books and live through write, all part of life body can only live and decay, but mind can live beyond lights I 'll savor friendships and cherish life, to race against time... image:http://i387.photobucket.com It's a colorful write...your rhyme scheme changed from the first stanza...but you did ok CD |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 21, 2009 0:09:46 GMT -5
Secret Chapters Speak Volumes all her pages have been soiled in twighlight's stacatto refrain, in the secret passages of a moon done and undone. and of what blood she splaterred upon shadows with gods, urchins and empty halls, as if, her wandering spirit never lusted for holier days, or even nights... scum of the earth, bile of rivers she. only, she traveled on chapters of lives unseen unheard by mortals no braver than normal circumstance. she crowns herself with all the sins of dark refuge; she is after all, darkness breathing real, plump light (done, 15 minutes??) interesting write, but it lack a rhyming format...keep at it. CD |
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Post by cdlight on Feb 21, 2009 0:16:36 GMT -5
Secret Chapters Speak VolumesI have called your name before I was born that sweet melody have always in my mind ever since I can speak and sing some songs you are always in my heart days and nights the language we speak no one can hear the flowers and roses we grow no one can see only God and angels are with us so near for letting us enter heavenly garden roam and see... Oh! my secret half of my heart and soul as if God and angels put us to earthy land we lose each other from time to time that flows but for always we sing with love and dance when winter days you bring me summer lights warm through my being with sunsets rays when rian and storm you tenderly hug me tight for heaven and earth no home like you gave Oh! I love you more than everything in earth or sky! I call your name every second days and nights let my silent volumes embrace your heart and mind with God and angels we go beyond time and lights! Another good write Sunny, Your rhyming structure needs to be consistent throughout the poem though...I see the first stanza as a contract to the reader...it's what they expect...if the first stanza doesn't rhyme, I don't expect or want the rest of the poem to be different. If you establish the rhythm and the rhyme early, the reader picks that up and expects it to be there for the rest of the poem...You have a special gift with word choice...keep at it. CD |
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