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Apr 9, 2010 2:58:20 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 2:58:20 GMT -5
RISE
raindrops
descend
from
mauve-gray
sky
angry winds
rustle
oak tree
leaves
foot heels
echo
on damp
asphalt
broken soul
hungers
for
absolution
from sins
long since
forgotten
beyond
horizon
clouds
dissipate
sun
begins
to rise
©2009 Lisa Arnold
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RISE
Apr 9, 2010 3:04:04 GMT -5
Post by Brian on Apr 9, 2010 3:04:04 GMT -5
another fine write, Lisa. I like the style of these writes. Good to see you posting more.
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Apr 9, 2010 3:08:05 GMT -5
Post by Dana on Apr 9, 2010 3:08:05 GMT -5
I enjoyed this entire poem, great job  These are my favorite lines: "broken soul
hungers
for
absolution
beyond
horizon
clouds
dissipate
sun
begins
to rise"
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Apr 9, 2010 3:14:29 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 3:14:29 GMT -5
another fine write, Lisa. I like the style of these writes. Good to see you posting more. Hello Brian   so much  |
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Apr 9, 2010 3:15:46 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 3:15:46 GMT -5
I enjoyed this entire poem, great job These are my favorite lines: "broken soul
hungers
for
absolution
beyond
horizon
clouds
dissipate
sun
begins
to rise"
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Apr 9, 2010 3:26:34 GMT -5
Post by Betty on Apr 9, 2010 3:26:34 GMT -5
well-written and great flow, a most graceful and elegant write!
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Apr 9, 2010 3:32:58 GMT -5
Post by Eddie on Apr 9, 2010 3:32:58 GMT -5
good tone...I like the quiet emotion you use to convey the message of your poem, that no matter how bad life gets a new day will bring some sense of relief, great write!
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Apr 9, 2010 3:36:01 GMT -5
Post by Betty on Apr 9, 2010 3:36:01 GMT -5
I wanted to also add that I like the way you offered hope in the end and let the sun begin to rise!
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Apr 9, 2010 3:48:07 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 3:48:07 GMT -5
well-written and great flow, a most graceful and elegant write! Betty for your kind comments, glad you enjoyed my poem |
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Apr 9, 2010 3:49:44 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 3:49:44 GMT -5
good tone...I like the quiet emotion you use to convey the message of your poem, that no matter how bad life gets a new day will bring some sense of relief, great write! Hi Eddie thank you for commenting and yes I feel no matter how bad things get here is always a glimner of hope |
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Apr 9, 2010 3:50:54 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 3:50:54 GMT -5
I wanted to also add that I like the way you offered hope in the end and let the sun begin to rise! Hey Betty thanks again, yeah I had to let the sun rise |
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Apr 9, 2010 4:23:41 GMT -5
Post by Kristi on Apr 9, 2010 4:23:41 GMT -5
great flow and imagery used....well-done these are my favorite parts: "broken soul hungers for absolution from sins long since forgotten" |
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Apr 9, 2010 4:31:53 GMT -5
Post by Silent-One on Apr 9, 2010 4:31:53 GMT -5
beautiful poetry, excellent write and read, enjoyed  every single word thanks for posting, Lisa I am off to work, have a great day |
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Apr 9, 2010 4:40:43 GMT -5
Post by Cherrie on Apr 9, 2010 4:40:43 GMT -5
This is one of my favorites by you. I have read this on one of your writing sites. You have added to it here and it is even better than when I first read it Lisa, it is so good to see you posting more often |
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Apr 9, 2010 5:10:11 GMT -5
Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2010 5:10:11 GMT -5
thanks so much Kristi, Harry and Cherrie, I much appreciate your kind comments yes, Cherrie you have read this before on one of my other sites. it was much shorter, glad yoe like the cahnges...I do too have a great day Harry and everyone |
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so much 
every single word 
and 
all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
