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Post by Lisa Arnold on Jan 25, 2007 8:43:52 GMT -5
My poem "Life Fail" was published online at Events Quarterly in 2007....The magazine is no longer online, but it was a steady publisher of mine for about 3 years, I sure do miss that magazine...Hope you enjoy it 
LIFE FAIL
At the soles
of bloodied feet,
lies remnants
of an ill-fated life.
Desperate pleas
for rescue
fall hushed against
velocity’s devastation.
Broken footpaths
fail to leave a trail.
Anguished screams
are buried amid
the rubble.
©2007 Lisa Arnold
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Post by Reggie on Jan 25, 2007 8:47:49 GMT -5
Hi Lisa, poignantly scribed poem
I feel these lines, been there many times
"Desperate pleas
for rescue
fall hushed against
velocity’s devastation"
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Post by Silent-One on Jan 25, 2007 9:02:50 GMT -5
nice work, Lisa  like these lines: Broken footpaths fail to leave a trail. good to read ya again!  call me soon  |
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Post by ciara on Jan 25, 2007 9:09:25 GMT -5
Hey Lisa, it's been a long time since you've posted your work, nice to read you again  this is a strong mosaic of depth and emotion, good job! I know this feeling all too well |
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Post by Sara on Jan 25, 2007 9:29:24 GMT -5
what a great day to check the site, love this!
take care Lisa, love ya!
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Post by Sharon on Jan 25, 2007 9:50:55 GMT -5
great write, Lisa
good opening, and I love the closing stanza
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Post by Joan on Jan 25, 2007 10:14:49 GMT -5
a pleasure to read you, dear Lisa
nice work indeed
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Jan 25, 2007 17:21:03 GMT -5
thanks reggie, appreciate the read and nice comments!
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Jan 25, 2007 17:21:52 GMT -5
nice work, Lisa like these lines: Broken footpaths fail to leave a trail. good to read ya again! call me soon thanks bunches Harry! I woll call ya soon |
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Jan 25, 2007 17:24:50 GMT -5
thanks so much ciara, sara, sharon and joan!
all your comments mean much to me!
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Post by Treasure on Jan 25, 2007 18:45:36 GMT -5
love this Lisa, especially the opening section, nice write
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Post by Charles on Jan 25, 2007 19:50:34 GMT -5
you make every word count, very well-expressed write, Lisa
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Post by Brian on Jan 25, 2007 19:56:12 GMT -5
love this as well, good to read you again, thanks for sharing
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Post by netfolk on Jan 25, 2007 22:51:01 GMT -5
devastation of swift and horrendous magnitude you have portrayed here Lisa, the images were staggering. Well expressed in very few lines, most likely a skill acquired from writing so many haikus. Excellent pen as always and I hope it is history or fiction.
peace as always,
Bernie
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Post by trina on Jan 25, 2007 23:40:28 GMT -5
I adore this poem, you have caputured my life completely in this eloquent write
you are a true poet, my dear friend
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all
time for me 
echoes, hope you all are doing well 
